I WAS ASSINGED TO WRITE A NARRATIVE ESSAY ON MY FIRST STAY AWAY FROM HOME.
CAN SOMEONE HELP ME REVISE AND IMPROVE THIS ESSAY
Life is short and we need to make our decisions faster without wasting our time. For this we need support and help which we get from our family and friends all our life so we never want them apart. We always want them in our every moments of our life weather at our dejection or exhilaration but it is not the same as we desire. Life is a journey and you never know what happens next so you could end up anywhere at any time.
It was August 9th 2008 when I first came to the United States of America leaving all my family and friends behind. I was a stranger over here as I knew nothing what next I was going to face in my future life. As I went to my new home I had already started to miss my old home since the whole place seemed totally new and strange to me. The weather was hot like hell; I was not used to this type of weather at all but had to change my behaviors. The apartment looked deluxe but I still missed the room back in my home which I had organized by my style with the woofers on all the corners of the room and off course my precious little guitar which I used to play whenever I got bored and lonely as now. Whereas in my new room I had a little study table where I have those thick books that I studied every night to gain a good GPA and those comfortable queen sized bed where relieved all my stress sleeping tight. The room had a door to the patio from where I could see the big tennis court where the children used to play other games like basketball and cricket rather than tennis. I found it hard to build friendship with my neighbors as I never saw them since they were too busy.
I was having a hard time getting used to this environment and life style. It was a busy life here. Nobody had time to relax. Everybody used to leave home so early, come back late, eat and sleep. This was the daily routine of most of the people over here. It seemed good to be busy but still I found it very exhausting and dull life because we had the same life schedule each and every day without any time to chill out with friends. I worked with a company named ATC Logistics and Electronics where we used test phones, check their functions, pack it and distribute it to the sellers. It was nice working there since there were many people of my nationality and I felt like I was in my own neighborhood but as I became familiar with the work I started to find it really unexciting. As I mentioned, this became my daily routine, wake up, go to work, come back, eat and sleep. There was nothing exciting and fun in my life anymore. But life became more complicated after my college started. I became busier than I was before. I was getting more frustrated because of my hectic life.
As I was having such a hard time I really missed my home and also off course my gorgeous wife who really cared and loved me. As the days passed by my wound of loneliness was getting worse but my goal to completing my studies was getting closer. I really wanted to accomplish what I wanted quickly and get back to my family. Till then I was getting used to the people around me and knew a lot about how this struggling life would end up to. It was a life time experience living and dealing with people of different culture and nations and trying to gain more useful knowledge.
I had never thought my life would be here at this point struggling for success and waiting for my goal to be achieved. I was not the same anymore as the time had brought changes in me but I'm still waiting to get back and get the warm loving hug from my family. As I know now that living my life on my own as a stranger out in the unknown world would never be the same as where I had grown up.
We always want them in our every moment of our life, whether a t our dejection or exhilaration, but reality is not the same as we desire.
I was a stranger over here as I knew nothing what next I was going to face in my future life.--- wow that is amazing!! What a crazy adventure that must have been...
This is a great story... I really enjoyed hearing about your process.
Until then, I had been getting used to the people around me and knew a lot about how this struggling life would end up.
I was not the same anymore, as the time had brought changes in me, but I'm still waiting to get back and get the warm loving hug from my family.
I know now that living my life on my own, as a stranger out in the unknown world, can never be the same as it was where I grew up.
You have a great, great way of writing. It must be great because it reflects deep thinking that you learned when you gained this crazy new perspective.
Every child needs to be surrounded by tenderness and love in order to grow up to be a successful person. Parents try as much as they can to offer everything that is required for their baby to have a comfortable life. However, when their children become teenagers, they will want to prove their maturity in many different ways, and one of them is moving out to live independently. In my belief, leaving home to live independently cannot indicate the teenagers’ maturity base on three following reasons: young people are lack of maturity, they cannot receive support from family and school, and their finance will be unstable. First of all, teenagers cannot live independently due to the lack of maturity. At this age, teenagers cannot predict the consequences of their doings. They will be undisciplined and begin to do bad things.
All moving out-teenagers will be overwhelmed with having to take care of themselves so they will easily to be depress. Therefore, they will start to get into bad habits such as drinking, abusing drugs, and smoking in order to release stress. Moreover, they are very young, so they are unable to have thought through decisions. Teenagers without their parents have no one there to tell them right or wrong and they will probably end up making bad choices. Furthermore, teenagers can easily be influenced by others especially bad people; therefore, they can entice into committing crimes. Because the rate of criminals, drinking, and drugs is so high for teenagers that move out early, young people should not live apart from their parents.
Next, when they start to live independently so early, they will be lack of many strong support systems such as family and education. Preventing from starvation is a must; however, these young people do not have enough time to learn how to cook for themselves. Instead of eating cooked nutritious food, teenagers have to eat instant food or fast food which is not good for their health. Thus, they will miss the food made by their parents. Moreover, when they live away from home, they will have to do the work themselves. Cleaning, washing clothes, finding food and shelter will cost lots of time and effort, so it will not leave so much time to do other things. Besides, moving out during teenage years, there will be a higher chance of dropping out of school because their time is all spent on working and doing housework. When their study is interrupted, they will be lack of knowledge, and this will prevent them from having a job, a better life and brighter future.
Finally, living on their own, teenagers cannot receive the needed financial support from parents which leads to the financial instability. Having a place to stay, having enough money to live and to protect oneself require a lot of money. On the other hand, earning money is an extremely difficult task, and for young people, they also have to take on further challenges when finding a job. For instance, many jobs require lots of degrees and certificates; moreover, most places do not allowed youngsters to work under the legal working age which is an18 years old. Most early teenagers are very stubborn and they are scared of being embarrassed; therefore, they will not likely to ask for any help from anybody. So when they do not have enough money to support their lives, they will easily commit crimes. At a result, they become a burden to society.
In conclusion, teenagers are the one who always want to prove themselves to the world. One of the most common methods is leaving home when they are very young and are not mature enough. However, living apart from parents during the teenage years is not a good indicator to prove their maturity. Living alone in the society is very dangerous to people especially teenagers, due to the fact that they can be influenced from many bad forces in real life. Therefore, I believe that the most wonderful time in life is teenage years and people should always value this period of time with their parents.